Basicly I'm hoping to get someone that would be willing to read act 2 of my pilot story. I'm new to action and not sure if it flows correctly. Note I'm changing the baies name now that was a typo and didn't catch it until now.
Any help you could offer would be great.
The entire episode is 45 minutes long.
logline:
As a village prepares for battle, as a young couple says goodbye. The battle insures leading to a show down between light and darkness, a child is discovered and new hope rises from the ashes of the fallen village.
Story Structure (Based on Syd Feild's Paradigm)-
Word Doc, structure in more detail-
http://www.fileden.com/files/2007/4/27/1021456/Pilot%20Episode%20outline.doc Act 2- The Battle of hurit
http://www.fileden.com/files/2007/4/27/1021456/Enupay%20The%20Savior%20of%20Hurit.doc Any help you can provide would be great, if you want to see any thing like character designs or the rest of the story please ask.
hope you enjoy thanks for your time^_^
