help ME!!

[scripter]

Hi NutsForGettobOOTY,

"but ive read thats its handy to have a hot LOGLINE of your script before writting. If I have to change direction with my LOGLINE I will."

Having a logline in mind is good to give you a kickstart with the script, but once you commence with the script there will be additional ideas that may compromise you're original logline. Any writer's concentration should be with the script itself, structure, character development etc. Once the script is completed, you then turn your attention to a kick ass logline, forgetting about the original one, if it no longer suits.

Based on the loglines below, we know who the protag' is, we also know his objective, but what's his dilemma? What does he have to overcome in order to succeed? This is a sci-fi script is it not?

A futuristic soldier is ordered to locate his missing comrades and must...

Scripter 

[scripto]

You should be able to summarize you screenplay in a sentence or two.

How about: A war torn soldier of the future is sent to find his missing comrades.  Along the way, he learns the truth about what he's fighting for.

Or: A rebel warrior seeks recruits to help stop the all-powerful government which is bent on forcing it's citizens to destroy each other.

It's very similar to what you might read in the TV guide.

You have to remember that even if you hook someone with a way-cool logline, you have to write the whole script to back it up!

[NutsForGettoBooty50]

but ive read thats its handy to have a hot LOGLINE of your script before writting. If I have to change direction with my LOGLINE I will.

Can you help me with this one?

1-Jack, a brave warrior in a rebellion army must travel to seek recruits, to fight its governmant that is forcing its people to fight to the death.

I know it sounds the same but its not, its supposed to be a fighting movie, like mortal kombat or street fighter. I think I put too many words in it just wondering could you shorten it and tell me does it sound like a HOT screenpay. Thanks for your help anyway.

[scripto]

You do not specify the genre in a logline.  Is this for a finished script?  Try not to let the logline be the reason you put oFf writing the script.  There are far too many reasons NOT to write, and we all search for those reasons every day.  Settle down and get the words on the paper.  Finish the script, and then worry about a logline.

[NutsForGettoBooty50]

Here are a few attepts for a logline:

1 - JASON, war torn soldier, in a futuristic war, is sent to search for missing marines. but also discovers the truth about the war and its history.
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its supposed to be  sci movie, about a fictional war between humans and an alien race. its about a soldier with post traumatic stress from the war, and is sent out to look for missing soldiers, who are taught to be dead or gone AWOL. He discover from meeting his enemies , the truth about the war. thats what its about, but i dont know how much info i should give or just leave out. of some one can help me improve. or even give me feed back about my idea, then that would be great.