Working class logline

[ScriptNurse]

The hard part is getting some amount of the 5-W's included and have it be something you can say in one breath.

[scripto]

Thanks Don.  I'm trying hard to think of precise, sharp minimal loglines.

[ScriptNurse]

Very nice!

[scripto]

Perhaps:

The gravy train ends for a spoiled rich girl, so she is forced to get a job and learns the hard way that money isn't everything.

[ScriptNurse]

Index cards work ... easy to stick to the wall and rearrange as needed.

The gravy train ends for a spoiled rich girl and she is forced to get a job where she learns that money can't buy everything and she changes her outlook on life.

This implies that the spoiled rich girl is a snotty snob who knows she's spoiled — and revels in it. She thinks she has a tight grip on the world's crotch, so when things fall apart, they REALLY have to unravel ALL THE WAY. She has to hit bottom. That's when she turns to that nice girl that she works with at the low-class place where she managed to somehow get a job ...

[pat21532]

i outline most of the time but i'm going to try using index cards

[ScriptNurse]

How do you write? That is ... do you map out your story on paper or index cards? Do you know how the whole story is going to be structured before you write scene 1? Or, do you just start and see where it takes you?

[pat21532]

this is a logline for an idea that i found going through some old notes

life is a shopping trip to lindsey ahrris until her father cuts her off

lindsey harris is a spolied rich girl who thinks money grows on trees. lindsey is forced to get a job to pay off a debt. she meets a coworker who changes her outlook on life and finds out that money can't buy everything.


How is this.

Thanks for all the reply for my other 2 loglines now i got alot of writing to do