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« Reply #2 on: September 13, 2007, 12:08:32 AM »

Back to the future meets Star Wars and gives birth to E.T. and Terminator 2.

Thanks for the feedback. No religion. However there is a moment of "Absolation." It's a word that this lonely boy invented. Described  as if the past, present and future were to flow together for one fleeting moment... and things make sense.
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« Reply #1 on: September 12, 2007, 09:06:01 PM »

Would you say LOST IN SPACE meets THE TIME MACHINE?

I would edit this just a tad, only in order to make it a little shorter and tighter ... something like this:

A lonely boy befriends two robots from the future and learns a frightening secret about humanity and in a race against time, fate and forces beyond his reach, he discovers that salvation is but a stone’s throw away.

I have but one question ... "salvation" usually carries with it a religious overtone. Is that what is intended here?
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« on: September 12, 2007, 07:15:42 PM »

A lonely young boy befriends two robots from a distant future and learns a frightening secret about humanity. In a race against time, fate and forces beyond his reach… this boy will discover that salvation is but a stone’s throw away.
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