Hi again,
Sorry for asking yet another question.
I'm close to the end of my screenplay and I'm overflowing with creativity!
There's a scene towards the end of my story where the Killer stalks a group of unsuspecting victims along a corridor. I'll give you a rough example of the kind of thing I'm trying to achieve...
INT. CORRIDOR - DAY
The Killer discretely follows Bill and Ben as they walk.
The Killer steps up the pace. He's getting closer.
Bill and Ben walk.
The Killer reaches into his pocket.
Bill and Ben walk.
The Killer pulls out a knife.
Bill and Ben walk.
The Killer's very close. Within striking distance.
Bill and Ben walk.
The Killer does nasty things to Bill and Ben.
etc.
As you can see, the phrase "Bill and Ben walk" features a lot. I'm just wondering what the best way of handling this would be? Some kind of INTERCUT and MONTAGE? Or do I think of different ways of saying "Bill and Ben walk"?
I've tried to think of an existing movie where something similar happens so that I can examine the screenplay. So far, Nada.
