Problems, problems, problems.........

[ScriptNurse]

What if he's constantly striving to "up the ante" with each victim? Maybe he sees anyone of celebrity status a someone in desperate need of dispatch ... bigger celebrities need it much more than a small town TV weather girl, for example.

[rnbrewer]

Depending on how acurate you want the script to be to the novel you might want to consider adding story elements that weren't previously in the novel.

Film being the medium that it is cannot traditionally support the kind of sensory details that a novel can. Sometimes character thoughts become dialoge or actions rather than using the age old technique of voice over to display them.

Perhaps this would be a good chance to explore some of your stories many elements. Maybe there are a couple characters in the novel that might shine more in a film. Experiment a little. It is your novel after all so anything you do in the script could simply build off the currently existing story. You could even re-develop the script to be more of a companion piece rather than an exact translation of the original story. You can go in many directions with this. Perhaps a side story. Or, maybe you try retelling the story from the perspective of the victims.

That's all I got for ya, let me know what you think.

[Chuck58]

I'm stuck!! I've been working on a script for a while. The first few pages, admittedly rough, are in SHOWCASE.

Well, I'm about 40 odd pages into this thing. I stopped and re-read the script. Up to about page 20 or so, things seem to be working. After that, it begins to be very repetitious. He kills a victim, takes what money they have as a donation, since he isn't murdering them but sending them to Heaven. Then, he goes someplace, sleeps, eats, and begins hunting another victim, or soul that God needs in Heaven.

The problem is, this guy - both in my novel and in the script - has no other life. It worked in the novel since it was stream of thought. Reading the novel is reading what he's thinking from beginning to end. Trying to put that into a motion picture script has got me stumped.

Just venting. I'm not sure there's an answer.