Log Line - Ian has a life long run of bad luck, and his room mates, the four horsemen of the apocalypse, aren't helping.
Synopsis - Ian's life can't get much worse. It started when his girlfriend of three years dumped him and left him with a seven month lease he couldn't afford. In order to make the rent, he puts an add in the post about subletting his apartment, only to be answered by the four horsemen. They turn out to be the room mates no one wants to be stuck with. They are rude, lazy, and literally make Ian's life a living hell. Then there is Mary. A girl he has yet to talk to, but is totally infatuated with. The only time Ian seems happy is when he's thinking about Mary, but with his run of bad luck, his low self esteem and little help from his room mates, his chances at happiness seem slim.
This is a short script running about 37 pages, and I was wanting some constructive criticism on my first draft. I'd like to hear what works and what doesn't. This is my first completed script so let it fly.
ash.fischer@yahoo.com-ash
